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The River by ~Anubis187:iconAnubis187:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Haiku & Eastern


A deep green bouquet
Of wild grass meanders
Gently on the bank.

A sea of flowers
Ranging from every shade
Wave within the wind.

A peaceful image,
Like gifts along the journey
Of a quiet life.

A tall oak tree rests
Atop the nearby hillside,
Casting shade ahead.

As the river flow
Becomes more shallow in depth,
The journey concludes.

A perfect sunset
Sets over the peaceful scene.
Like a fairytale,

But it has a flaw.
It is a river of life
Without a meaning.

Devoid of just cause
Or a grand purpose in fate,
Lost in the chaos.
©2009 ~Anubis187
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Author's Comments

haiku poetry...it's rather lovely.

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~FallenMercykiss Jan 13, 2009, 2:36:31 PM
it is peaceful until u realize it just leads to chaos :)

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~Anubis187 Jan 13, 2009, 2:37:32 PM
the ultimate illusion: life.

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~FallenMercykiss Jan 13, 2009, 2:45:22 PM
i heard.. that the spirit/mental world is more real then the physical.. in a sense..

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**)(Maybe it was wrong of me to hold u up so high )( **
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~Anubis187 Jan 13, 2009, 2:51:25 PM
one can only hope

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=XxWreckoningxX Jan 13, 2009, 6:19:41 PM
Ah, soothing. =]

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~Anubis187 Jan 13, 2009, 6:20:35 PM
Thanks :hug:

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=XxWreckoningxX Jan 13, 2009, 6:23:10 PM
Welcome.

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=panKakes91 Jan 13, 2009, 6:26:51 PM
i adore the sentiment of this! the ways of deception, and yet you'd almost prefer not to know that it just leads to chaos in the end. the easy peacefullness of the illusions, and the ultimate demise of the picture you painted. and the structure was interesting too. the haiku-ism (probably not a word) in multiple stanzas ties it all together and yet keeps it neatly separate, also, the sense of innate organization adds to the captivating wording and wondeful imagery. :) veeeeery good job ^_^

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~Anubis187 Jan 13, 2009, 6:39:26 PM
Wow, thank you so much for your feedback! I've been trying to write quite a bit like this, but I've only posted a few of the really good long ones. I'm really glad you liked it! =]

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